INSTRUCTIONS
Skim over the following student essays, select one, read it carefully, and comment on the following eight questions, in at least a page of response.
Be sure to number your responses, and give the kind of feedback you’d like to receive as a writer to help you most effectively and successfully write your own paper.
Please note: Each question should be discussed and explained; simple “yes” or “no” answers are insufficient.
- Which specific ideas, words, phrases, or images struck you as particularly memorable and effective?
- Which specific things struck you as confusing or needing elaboration?
- Where does the writer use descriptions to show rather than tell? Where would more sensory description, dialogue, or detail help readers engage more with the narrative?
- As a reader, what do you want to hear more about?
- In your own words, what would you say is the meaning of your peer’s essay?
- Is the meaning significant and clear, and does it have a strong connection to the narrative? Is the reflection on the idea discussed at least 25% of the essay?
- What does this draft do especially well?
- What two or three things would most improve the draft in revision?
STUDENT ESSAYS
Select one of the following essays for your student response (see attachments below for student essays):
- Academia – Effects of Nurse Burnout – Final 4
- Collegiate – Gender Inequalities in Medical Care – Final 3
- Educate – Truth About Sugars – Final 1
- Pupil – Why AI Needs Copyright – Final 7
- Salutatorian – Cash The King of Small Business – Final 1
- Scholar – Auditors in Audit Fraud RA – final 22
- Valedictorian – Dangers of Artificial Sweeteners – Final 11